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IELTS Speaking Feedback
Cue Card Describe the role that music plays in your life. You should say: •What type of music or musical activities you enjoy •How often you listen to music or play music •What effect music has on you And explain why music is important or unimportant to you
Response
For the topic about the role of music in my life...erm...I have to say for that that the type of music
that attractive to me the most is...erm...pop music, and easy listening, and also jazz, but the type
of music that I listen to the most is easy...easy slow pop and easy listening type of music.
And...I listen to the music everyday to...erm...national radios and...er...pop radio that...er...
The...the...the most fa..the the most famous one is called Greenwave, which is the..the radio
station...erm...for targetted to...for...targetted to...er...working...er...working pe...people and to...to
adult.
And...and...er...to me music is quite important and it's...erm...it very have many...er...useful...I
mean...er...ok...first is the music can bring up my mood when...when I'm feeling down or when I'm
depressed and I choose to listen to the music that got...erm...more rhythmic and...er...very active
or...erm...the happy type of music to listen on it...very helpful to...to lift up my...my bad mood when
I'm feeling down.
Grammar & Vocabulary Analysis
For the topic about the role of music in my life, I have to say for that the type of music that
attractive to me that is attractive to me (‘Attractive’ is an adjective. You are using a relative clause
so you cannot have the relative pronoun ‘that’ + adjective. It must be followed in this case by the
verb ‘is’ which you have missed out) the most is pop music, and easy listening, and also jazz, but
the type of music that I listen to the most is easy slow pop and easy listening types (Must be
plural as you are talking about several types of music, not just one) of music.
And I listen to the music (You are talking about music generally. We don’t use an article to talk
about general things, so no article is used. e.g. ‘I like cars’ not ‘I like the cars’) everyday, to
national radios radio stations and pop radio that and (You are just giving additional information so
you should not be using ‘that’ to make a relative clause) the most famous one is called
Greenwave, which is the radio station targeted to at (‘target’ collocates with the preposition ‘at’)
working people and to at (as per the last comment) adults (You are not talking about one adult,
but adults generally so it should be plural).
And to me music is quite important and it very have many useful it has many very useful (You are
getting basic word order mixed up. It should be subject+verb+determiner+adverb+adjective)…I
mean…ok...first is the first useful thing is that (You haven’t yet said what ‘first’ is referring to so
you have to say i.e. ‘useful thing’) the music can bring up improve (‘mood’ collocates with
‘improve’, not ‘bring up’) my mood when I'm feeling down or when I'm depressed and I choose to
listen to the music that got has / has got (You are talking about ‘possessing’ something, in this
case ‘rhythm’. For possession we use have / have got. ‘He has got rhythm’; ‘He has a car’, not ‘he
got a car’. ) more rhythmic rhythm (It’s a noun not an adjective) and very active [unclear what you
mean] or the happy type of music to listen on to (Faulty collection. We listen ‘to’ something. ) it
which is (you should use a relative clause as you are giving extra information about the ‘happy
type of music’ you listen to) very helpful to lift up my bad mood lift my mood (You don’t ‘lift up a
mood’, people ‘lift their mood’ which means to improve it) when I'm feeling down.
Grammar:
There is not a very wide range of complex sentences used, and those that are used, such as the
relative clauses often have errors in. You have these particular problems that you should practice
and work on:
•Relative clauses
•Prepositions & Collocations
•Basic Word Order
Band 5
Vocabulary:
There is limited flexibility with your vocabulary and you have difficulty talking about things at
length. And there are problems with paraphrasing i.e. finding other ways to explain things when
you can’t find the word needed.
Band 5
Pronunciation
Your pronunciation is generally ok in that most individual words can be understood, though there
are some problems such as sounding like you say "when I'm feeling douw" instead of “down".
But there are frequent lapses in the delivery with lot’s of stuttering, which means a band 6 cannot
be reached.
Band 5
Fluency and Cohesion
The major problem with your IELTS speaking response is the fluency and coherence. You keep
hesitating and there are lots of 'erm' and 'er' all the way through which interrupt the flow of
speech. There is a lot of self-correction and more difficult speech causes particular problems.
Coherency is completely lost at one point when you seem to get very confused:
“And...and...er...to me music is quite important and it's...erm...it very have many...er...useful...I
mean...er...ok...first is the music can”.
Band 5
Overall Score - Band 5